Language Feature - Onomatopoeia

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I'm going to share with you my writing that is written by bullet points. We've done this on our Collaborative Writing Document. Its sometimes lag so that why I couldn't post this on time. We are working on Language feature. Language feature is:  Something special or different made with words. Our Language feature is Onomatopoeia.


We are wring onomatopoeia which is sounds written in words. Like Achoo, Ahem, Arf, Arghh, Bang, Bark, Boo, Brrng, Bump, Buzz, Cackle, Chatter, Cheer, Clap, Clank, Click, Crackle, Crash, Crunch, Ding-Dong, Drip, Eek, Fizz, Flipflop, Growl, Haha, Hiccup, Honk, Howl, Hush, Jingle, Jangle, Knock, Lala, Meow, Moan, Moo, Murmur, Neigh, Oink, Plop, Poof, Pop, Pow, Psst, Quack, Ribbit, Ring, Roar, Rustle, Rumble, Shhh, Sizzle, Slap, Smash, Smack, Squish, Swoosh, Thud, Thump, Tick-Tock, Whisper, Whimper, Woof, Zip, Zoom and more. An example of an onomatopoeia is "The man was holding a gun and shot up the sky, BANG!" We are going to check out another language feature next week maybe. Its called Personification. Okay its now time for my writing.

Here is my writing

I walked to the 800 meter race track waiting for the guy in the yellow jacket to Position me.
He was the guy who was also starting the race. He told us in a clear voice and the man in
the yellow jacket fired a shot his staring gun up the sky. ‘Crash!’ I dashed my way into first
place running and sweating. The audience was cheering loudly “Go go go go!” The commentator
was talking in loud l voice. I kinda slowed down a little after I got tired. The loud thundering behind
me as my breeze in the air. My heart was breathing fast and the other racers puff their breath at
my back. I got slower but the other racers were far, I did it! I ran to the finish line and won the 800
meter track. I did it again. The other racers feet were thudding fast to the finish line. I puff and sat
down on the chair and rest. 

I am running an 800 meter track race

I can hear:

• I walk to the starting line waiting for the guy wearing the yellow jacket, he was the one who was
• starting the race. 
• He was putting us in the right position so it would be fair.
• The race starter shot the sky and a loud bang happen.
• The audience cheering -  Go Go Go! Name Go!
• I dash my way into first place
• The commentator talking
• I was running in fast speed then I slowed a little bit.
• The people’s feet behind me was thudding behind me. 
• My heart was beating as the other racer’s puffing their breath behind me.
• I was getting slower and slower but I made it first place again.

• The End Of The Race

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