Dust Buddies - Writing - Language Feature

Welcome Viewers,

Miss D taught us some of the main language features. We learnt about onomatopoeia, personification and hyperbole. I already know two language features which are metaphor and alliteration. We wrote some hyperbole poem, onomatopoeia and personification. 

The sentences I'm going to show you are a mix of language features that we learnt.  There are onomatopoeia, hyperbole and personification. If you can't find any language features please comment about it because I might have miss one language feature. 

Here is my writing

Dust Buddies  16/9/19

I hid under the living room table in fear because leaving the table was dangerous. The food was in front of my waiting to be eaten. My friends an family begged me to eat some food that was on the floor. They were munching it like crazy then the floor shook our whole world. Brrrm brrrm. They hesitated a little bit then ran as fast as they can. Some of them tried to escape but failed. I felt sad and mad and at the same time also felt like I was going to die the next day. I ran to the switch to turn it off so I will have time to get inside and save my friends and family. So I turned it off then ran inside the vacuum. 

“I think I will get out of here on time.” I said to myself as I ran 

I saw my friends and family in the dust like they are dead. In a big dust like they are bigger than Mt Everest. Their eyes look like that they turned into one whole thing. I think the giant is trying to suck us inside here and throw us away somewhere outside. I quickly grab them and made them back together getting dust and putting their eyes on. I told my friends to help me get them together and escape before they suck us back up. shhs I heard that the giant put the plug back in because it made a shock sound.

“Get out get out,” I yelled. “Make sure you don’t leave anyone behind,”

Everyone screamed and ran out of the vacuum. After when we got out the giant started the vacuum. I nearly got sucked in but my friend saved me. “Hey,” I said, “Let's get the giant because I think the giant is trying to get us out of this house.” We stand of the vacuum getting the attention of the giant. The giant was furious and got her cleaning brush. We turned on the vacuum Brrrm as we change to her sucking her inside the vacuum. Now the she  will know how we feel about getting thrown away. She tried escaping but we just throw her out of the house while she was inside the vacuum.

The End

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Sincerely Aaron