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This blog is the same as the other writing one but this one is improved by Miss D. I will try to continue with the story and I'll think of more ideas. Make sure you leave a comment because I need help with ideas so its easier. Also give me some language features idea so I could add more descriptive writing.
Miss D help me improved it a little bit so some of the writing is checked. Next time I'll do the The Most Dangerous Prompt Generator again and make another one. Leave a comment if you want to see it on my blog.
Here is my writing
He hadn't seen anything like it in twenty years of teaching. The door said crack as the door open. “Cracking” An old woman entered the room she looked like she was smiling at me while I was teaching.
"Umm, Who are you." I said, "Are you here to pick us someone or are you a visitor."
She looked at me smiling. People in class turned pale waiting for me to make a move and kick her out. Everyone held their breath trying to move but couldn't. As I held my breath a desk sounded like the students. All of my joyful students tried to say an excuse but didn’t get the confidence to say it. Tears came down thought Petra’s eyes as she wiped it off and ask me a question.
"Umm Teacher," Petra said looking pale, "Can I go to the bathroom"
"Okay but come back quickly," I cried.
"Fine I'll try to be quick,"
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